This past semester I have learned that I set up stories, and finish them quickly. I do not seem to be good at dragging out stories, but I personally hate when stories drag out. Though I need to add more to help my stories last longer, I hope I do not end up making my stories unbearably long. I can tell by reading my short stories that I need to work on stretching my stories and not ramming through them.
In my Three Billy Goats story, I did not add enough to my story. You, as a reader, would get the gist of the story but it was not good. The ending came too quickly, and it was basically a retelling of the same story. "“I'm really tired mister. I think I'll just go. I'm not dumb enough to risk my life.” and she turned and walked away from the confused troll. His confusion was short lived, as he caught the figures of the dead goats in the corner of his eye.
“At least I've got two goats.” he said to himself, quite pleased." That was a pretty rushed ending, I admit I didn't know how to finish it, because I didn't want to copy the story completely.
My imaginary story was my best set of descriptions. I feel like they came out the best, I used smells and sight. Rereading it, I feel like I did good because I have actually thought about this place a lot. "Above the open area is a bright night sky. The stars are shinning and big, and you can see many constellations. Different colors swirl in and mix together, becoming the background for the stars. The night sky’s stars are bright enough to fill the space bellow it, and the colorful background adds a changing feel to the area. Different colors splash around dying the fog that hovers over the grass. While the colors dance in the sky, they dance below them in the fog, blending around you." I, personally, feel like this would be really pretty to look at. Having this be the sky sounded great to me, and I thought about it a lot.
When it comes to my poems, poetry is poetry and I don't really think it should be judged. I would like to do more metaphors with them, I had fun doing my extended metaphor with the boy and the sweater. "His colorful feelings come together,and create a pattern of love. I wear his thoughts, no matter how tacky. His loving design is the perfect size. Although sometimes itchy, I find his fit is pleasant and comforting. He holds me tight and keeps me warm." I really like this part, I think it's cute. I make his words represent yarn, and his feelings as the pattern in the sweater. I thought I was being pretty clever, if you ask me.
Overall, I think I need to work on making my stories more lengthy and descriptive. That's something I used to be able to do, but since I haven't done it in a long time, and have lost the ability to do. I used to be able to describe things pretty well, and I would like to go back to that.
In my Three Billy Goats story, I did not add enough to my story. You, as a reader, would get the gist of the story but it was not good. The ending came too quickly, and it was basically a retelling of the same story. "“I'm really tired mister. I think I'll just go. I'm not dumb enough to risk my life.” and she turned and walked away from the confused troll. His confusion was short lived, as he caught the figures of the dead goats in the corner of his eye.
“At least I've got two goats.” he said to himself, quite pleased." That was a pretty rushed ending, I admit I didn't know how to finish it, because I didn't want to copy the story completely.
My imaginary story was my best set of descriptions. I feel like they came out the best, I used smells and sight. Rereading it, I feel like I did good because I have actually thought about this place a lot. "Above the open area is a bright night sky. The stars are shinning and big, and you can see many constellations. Different colors swirl in and mix together, becoming the background for the stars. The night sky’s stars are bright enough to fill the space bellow it, and the colorful background adds a changing feel to the area. Different colors splash around dying the fog that hovers over the grass. While the colors dance in the sky, they dance below them in the fog, blending around you." I, personally, feel like this would be really pretty to look at. Having this be the sky sounded great to me, and I thought about it a lot.
When it comes to my poems, poetry is poetry and I don't really think it should be judged. I would like to do more metaphors with them, I had fun doing my extended metaphor with the boy and the sweater. "His colorful feelings come together,and create a pattern of love. I wear his thoughts, no matter how tacky. His loving design is the perfect size. Although sometimes itchy, I find his fit is pleasant and comforting. He holds me tight and keeps me warm." I really like this part, I think it's cute. I make his words represent yarn, and his feelings as the pattern in the sweater. I thought I was being pretty clever, if you ask me.
Overall, I think I need to work on making my stories more lengthy and descriptive. That's something I used to be able to do, but since I haven't done it in a long time, and have lost the ability to do. I used to be able to describe things pretty well, and I would like to go back to that.